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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2009-10-09 09:04 AM


All that I have has been offered to you
My body lifted up, presented to you
Sacrifices, none too great to perform
My offerings, in this way, will not harm
Wrap myself in robes of white shimmering
Underneath star filled sky glimmering

Wreaths of holly placed upon my head
To remain after robes of white I shed
Bleeding sweat for every drop that I bled
And standing grey as stone with arms outspread

Encircled before flames consume me whole
Transfixed, sacrificed to a higher goal
I come and lay my body down by you
For salvation, nothing I would not do

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1 posted 2009-10-09 11:06 AM


Wrap myself in robes of white shimmering
Underneath star filled sky glimmering

Absolutely gorgeous!!

priyanka
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2 posted 2009-10-09 11:58 AM


Terrific!!
Klassy Lassy
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3 posted 2009-10-09 02:19 PM


I have goose flesh head to toe reading this, and think of tears of blood, and the one who gave all.  

With such vivid wordpaint you have penned a very powerful poem--stunning and beautifully done!  ~KL  

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