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Stroke of Autumn Embers
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Stroke of Autumn Embers |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Remembering you at the stroke of Autumn embers fanning campfire flames that went up in smoke. Seems a long time ago when you held me close sheltered from the storms that blew in from all directions. The aftermath is telling like a far cry echoes through the mountain pass on a wing and prayer ruffling the wind, that mingles with the scent of pine and senseless pining. Like a spindrift makes me shiver when the moon lies low behind a blanket of clouds breaking my defenses down the night sky wavers starless in my dreams. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: How perfectly you render this memory, this melancholy, dear Lori. A profoundly beautiful write. Love, Margherita |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Seems a long time ago when you held me close sheltered from the storms that blew in from all directions. I can relate to this, Lori. Autumn is beginning here with only a slight chill in the air, but it is refreshing for the moment~~  M |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Margherita~ You are always so nice in your replies and I appreciate them and you very much. Hi Maureen~ Funny you should pick out those lines. Briefly and fleeting also came to mind, like the best times in our lives, they are short lived, but those glorious moments are very special, indeed. So happy to see you here, thanks and hugs. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Seems a long time ago when you held me close sheltered from the storms that blew in from all directions." ~ and it is memories like those that can keep us warm when the cool winds of autumn begin to blow... Love your poetry! ~ and you! Linda  |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
blues this is my favorite of yours I love every single line  always love to read you |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Hi Bluesy! Sometimes remembering isn't such a good thing but in your case it is because it produces such touching poetry. "Senseless pining" - yes, of course it is but it's only the mind that knows it not the heart and the heart, you know, has a (here it comes) mind of its own! Hugs Helen |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
wow You are a stunner. Incredibly lovely write. L, H |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you ladies, for your encouraging words. Your kind replies make my poetic efforts worthwhile. And it is an effort, I am not one who's poetry comes easy. It's all there in my heart but getting it down on the page is another thing entirely. Many hugs this Sunday mornin'~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Seems a long time ago when you held me close sheltered from the storms that blew in from all directions. And even when it seems like (or is *S*) a lifetime ago... the memories still visit vividly... though few leave poems this beautiful. *S* |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Beautiful, Beautiful, and beautiful!  ARCTIC WIND |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
"Like a spindrift makes me shiver when the moon lies low behind a blanket of clouds" loved this write. ~Cheye |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks for the nice replies, Suthern, AW, and Cheye~ You add a little something special to my day, and I am truly flattered. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you are never far from starless you just conjure it up along with your fabulous moons and the stars will shine on loved your sky here blondie |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
How solitary this feels with vulnerability crowding every thought. It is beautifully poignant, and the imagery is decidedly cool and longing for the arms that have gone missing in the distance or time. ~KL |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
So great to see two of my favorite people here. You warm my heart with your sweet replies. Thank you blondielocks and Lassy~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This conveys such vivid images for me, well done! "A spring shower was cause to run |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Such a bitter-sweet piece, BluesSerenade. So appropriate for this time of year. The smoke from campfires carry memories for most of us, and you have captured the moment with clarity and beauty. Thank you. Sutra 5: Public self-criticism does not brighten one’s Spark of Brahman: it merely feeds one’s narcissism. |
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