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The Domino
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The Domino |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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and thought that none of this could do. So she matched the pieces up-- pip-to-pip 'cause she "saw through" the backs of them, in curlicued stamps of black like oreos, and she told them to what to do. "You there!" She grew feet to stomp "You're out of line!" She stopped to yank a wild vine growing as if to tease her tidy palms and my dis-ease... So she mopped her brow with leaves. "You're not a two up top, you're three!" We lined up accordingly. She seemed to know just what to do "Mind your bottom, that's a five.." I calculated eight, within my mind, I dreamed of how neat life would be once we were set accordingly... She made a pattern, and it fit: Why, when we'd topple, we would quit fidgeting discomforture-- she'd set us straight, so we'd endure the downfall of ourselves. There's no movement to this dance-- she had no pips, we had no chance to score ourselves creatively. We realized she was a blank dependent on our splotches as she fell - we all cliff-dived the gravity-- in a pattern prettily... A path of slattern slabs and that is the math of domi-knows.. engineered just-so that she has to be saved first 'cause we all huff beneath her weight waiting for the rescue orderly waiting to be told again just how we should line up. * * * |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms serene... I can just see you in line anywhere... enjoyed your art lady!! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Once again I say how I enjoy the excellence of your mind, Karen. So like your logical and lateral thinking to see dominoes and people mirrored in each other - and I SO enjoy your word play and how you expand the images into a movie, and with such delicious discussion along the way. Magnificent poem, Karen, just up my street. What a delight this would be for a teacher to use in an English poetry class! Owl |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
she'd set us straight, so we'd endure the downfall of ourselves. Oh, wow!!! If I don't get to read anymore poems today, I have the satisfaction of taking this with me into the werk monster's lair. Magnificent!! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I am sure this one was missed and many would love to read it.Amazing quick witted mind to write like this. latearrival |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
still not seen by many. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I came for the taste of wisdom, and left with glee! Serenity, you rock! |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"You're out of line!" hmmmmmmmm |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Mesmerized I watch the patterns of the vine, wind and bind, till flanked and banked and buttressed all...blank circumspect in hands of fate, taunting gaze, raze where I wait and breath abates each dot begotten parsec call to perfect parse... and watch them fall! You are so brilliant, Karen. I am completely in awe! I hope the reads here become a domino effect. This one should not be missed!  (Parsec: a unit of measure for interstellar space equal to a distance having a heliocentric parallax of one second or to 206,265 times the radius of the earth's orbit...) [This message has been edited by Klassy Lassy (11-22-2009 06:32 PM).] |
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