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vines of eden hedged |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477
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you were moved by my soliloquy but my stageless love was bright so I fed you paleful lilies in the gardens of my night I tried to tongue the sequined rivers as lonely fell from spaces warmed you deep in chasmed orchid soft hedged in eden places the gypsy of you would not smell home wombed sepulchral in my arms this wicked fruit would not tempt dripping ripe serpentine charms the woman of me shook for wanting the circles you traced weren't mine drawing swords of edgeless echos thorn pricked eyes bled words of vine begging in the reverb of glances we twined around each other I grew into red chimera you grew into another H |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
amazingly beautiful... the gypsy in you would not smell home... boy that surely describes me when I was a bit younger... really enjoyed this |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms UBP...enjoyed the twine of this and how you leave the ends frayed just enough |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
~oh, my...unbound, this is wonderful! the images, the words...couln't pick just one part to like! i am saving this and will come back to it again and again...thank you |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Lee So glad you enjoyed. Nice to meet you here! D TY dear. I love it when you look. brneyedgrly Thank you so much! Appreciate you. L, Heather |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your visuals are spell binding and the tale, so mysteriously telling. Brava, woman!!! |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Thank you so very much! Appreciate your kind comments. Heather |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
wicked sweet. -P Thirty bits of glass had become my teeth, |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Heather, you are a wondrous poetess you know. You bring emotion and ... here ... deep insight in the nature of us humans. It all makes sense, there is this touch of melancholy, but you offered it in high quality expressions. Love, Margherita |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Oh P yer such a sweetie. TY hon. Dearest Margherita your replies are always a treasure.TY. L, Heather |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
the woman of me shook for wanting the circles you traced weren't mine drawing swords of edgeless echos thorn pricked eyes bled words of vine begging in the reverb of glances we twined around each other I grew into red chimera you grew into another ~heather...can i just say that i've spent five minutes arguing with myself about my favorite part and changing my mind on what to quote... i would have had to copy the whole thing...but i finally settled on this. i am in awe at how you master your words and at the pictures they paint...wow for the second time : ) |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
You tint me blushful browneyed lady! Humble thanks for the treat of your second read, Heather |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
unboundpoetess - didn't know which verse I liked more, they were all spectacular... BC |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
your poetry is lush and fertile in its heavenly earthiness |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Heather, what more could I say that others here haven't? Loved this. Wow. |
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HAZARD Junior Member
since 2009-06-24
Posts 40ENGLAND |
I read this over several times - each read rewards focus. I can never seem to grasp things whole - they splinter into me jagged and spine tingling. Rich couplings like '... reverb of glances' waken me to thoughts - and poems yet unwritten. Good stuff. HAZARD |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
I tried to tongue the sequined rivers as lonely fell from spaces warmed you deep in chasmed orchid soft hedged in eden places That is quite a poem that you have written here my friend, a pleasure to read. The word Eden caught my eye as our property is named Eden. Lindsay |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My word! You are one talented poetess! I do believe that my having just now enjoyed your poem three times, is a good indication that is a  !!!  ....SAVED!!!  EA |
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