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changing of the gray guards
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changing of the gray guards |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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it was the night of crows playing tic tac tree changing their prospectives quite easily perhaps they are part of the new administration and since it was windless..well enough said the binky woman was wiggling her foot in sandals had her newspaper wrapped disposable bottle with orange juice and ice cream, little girl sized so she had to hold it in both hands and she burped after too much air and blushed and said a woman her age should have manners but at her age who gives a damn if she does or not it didn't scare the crows so god wouldn't mind and her tonka tommy was asleep in his walker anyway __________ daark (highway series) just a snapshot of an old couple at the bus stop...she was drinking an oj float she made (can't bring your own drinks in they say) and her hubby of 40 years was asleep, probably dreaming of when he was a boy with his tonka truck in the dirt lot world of his back yard... [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (09-02-2009 12:53 PM).] |
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ESHA SEN GUPTA Member
since 2009-09-01
Posts 108Maharashtra,India |
Went through your poem twice and well may be understood it partly .However i liked the way you have described our contemporary times and values. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
esha...thanks amigo.. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Your eyes record a moment and your pen renders it special and transforms it into a captivating story. Amazing. Love, Margherita |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
Excellet! All there ever really does seem to be in the moment, and you have done your usual fine job at capturing it! Huggs Jan |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar..thanks lady friend ___________ ms jb..thanks a hatfull.. |
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