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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2009-09-01 09:40 PM

The path is worn and beaten down from the summer sun.
The oak trees tireless in the heat of day
stretching their limbs over shallow ponds,
draped in the shade.

Warm beads glisten on bare backs
the rustle of leaves carry in the still breeze.
A splash of memories run deep
sweat and tears fall at my feet
stirring my emotions.

Like a cart wheel turning over and over
when stones skipped further
and our hearts grew fonder.

I can see your eyes in the shadows
hear your laughter in the distance
as if it were yesterday.
Of long lazy hours on end,
of golden sunsets and starry nights.

Even now I feel the angst and the joy
the bittersweetness that we were.
As my heart retreats in the offing of Autumn
when August gives way to a September sigh.

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

1 posted 2009-09-01 10:14 PM

"when August gives way to a September sigh."

great line, enjoyed.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2009-09-01 10:27 PM

Even now I feel the angst and the joy
the bittersweetness that we were.
As my heart retreats in the offing of Autumn
when August gives way to a September sigh.

O those Septembers sweet blues.......sing it sister...Feeling them too

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

3 posted 2009-09-01 11:42 PM

It's hard to believe that September is already here.

Suncleaver
Member

since 2009-01-18

Posts 481
Stafford England

4 posted 2009-09-02 01:38 AM

I enjoyed the emotion in this piece.

And all the roads that I've been strolling down... now I've found they all seem to be marooned. So profoundly doomed.

ESHA SEN GUPTA
Member

since 2009-09-01

Posts 108
Maharashtra,India

5 posted 2009-09-02 01:40 AM

The words echoed in my mind and memories came flying by

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2009-09-02 06:24 AM

Such wonderful emotions you share with us, dear Lori.

Enchanting!

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2009-09-02 07:39 AM

ms bluezy...

I can see this one in your eyes babe!!

Chalmette Guy
Senior Member

since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

8 posted 2009-09-02 08:24 AM

Bittersweet is the feeling in this beautiful poem.
Your style lends itself perfectly here.

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

9 posted 2009-09-02 06:37 PM

Like a cart wheel turning over and over
when stones skipped further
and our hearts grew fonder.
______________

lovely blues

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

10 posted 2009-09-02 09:11 PM

Enchanting write, Blues.
Ida

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

11 posted 2009-09-03 08:03 AM

Love your soulful September serenade, Bluesy One!

~ A smooth, lazy, hazy swan song.

Linda

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

12 posted 2009-09-03 09:33 AM

"A splash of memories run deep
sweat and tears fall at my feet
stirring my emotions."

I sit and swing after gardening while listening to memories on the radio~~ know this feeling, Lori.

I can't believe the weather change in just 2 days here.

Hoping you are not anywhere near those fires... keep safe.

M

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

13 posted 2009-09-03 05:33 PM

One of my favorites of yours. I loved how you tied in emotions and feelings with the seasonal change. You really described the summer heat perfectly and longing for septembers autumn.

ARCTIC WIND

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

14 posted 2009-09-04 09:56 PM

I am always a little taken back to be sharing these
blue pages with such wonderful and compassionate poets.

I thank each of you, sincerely!

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

15 posted 2009-09-05 08:02 PM

powerfully emotive 'write' ! ...

fine summer's-end imagery ...

"Even now I feel the angst and the joy
  the bittersweetness that we were.
  As my heart retreats in the offing of
  Autumn when August gives way to a
  September sigh."

... rather a "slice of every-person's life" ending

well done ... much applause for this 'penning!!

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

16 posted 2009-09-05 11:24 PM

If put to music, will make wonderful song.humming along..and much applause.enjoyed this write.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

17 posted 2009-09-05 11:28 PM

Bluesy - don't know how I overlooked this write, but I'm glad I found it. This is you, writing your thoughts...

BC

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

18 posted 2009-09-06 11:29 AM

Many thanks to you fine gentlemen for stopping by to read me.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

19 posted 2009-09-16 10:09 AM

A splash of memories run deep
sweat and tears fall at my feet

So very beautiful and bittersweet... this is lovely, Bluesy One!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

20 posted 2009-09-16 02:03 PM

I read this earlier. Now I've read it again and think it should go up again. Lovely write! I'm in the grip of a September sigh and never in my life have I ever gone to bed at 8.00 pm but that's where I'm off to. Those sighs are exhausting!

Helen

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