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Toccatta Junior Member
since 2009-07-08
Posts 26 |
He's become the stream within my palm, quenching my thirst, The cast shadow of my vein, The "with-me-ness" Lifting each moment of every day. He is the heat of a stove Bringing steam to copper kettle, The iron of life, The beginning, end and middle. How did this happen? To good end will it meet? When it's to him in the morning I wish my breath to greet? While I feel warmth in other lands; I am comforted by known-terrain, To be able to walk safely Unafraid of coming rains. Two countries I adore, One in which I'm loaned, The other is my home, Where the distant streams run gently through my palm. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh this is really nice, you breathe new life into the forum, and it is refreshing. Welcome to passions~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hi, there, Toccatta! Welcome aboard the 'Pip Ship' as I affectionately call it! You certainly have made a grand appearance with this spiritually beautiful poem. I thoroughly enjoyed it!  Clever title, as well! Giving you a warm, welcoming, pip hug, Earth Angel  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Welcome Toccatta, to Pip! I enjoyed reading your first entry. Beautifully rendered reflections upon life's gifts that deserve to be explored and appreciated. Love, Margherita  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
The "with-me-ness"...love that Certainly a very effective choice of words especially: "To be able to walk safely Unafraid of coming rains." I try to live by that~~ some days harder than others. M |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
I would welcome you but then that would make me sound like a regular, and it has been so long since I was a regular, that its a wonder people even remember me....... anyway...nice write |
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Toccatta Junior Member
since 2009-07-08
Posts 26 |
Thanks everybody for the nice welcoming! Tocatta |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
ouah toccata, there are so much expressions that i like in your poem "the with me ness" " my breath to greet", "the streams runnig in my palms", "my home land", this is both emotionnal and exquisite...Thanks for the beautiful poem. yann |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Welcome to PIP, Toccatta. Enjoyed your fiest post. Ida |
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Toccatta Junior Member
since 2009-07-08
Posts 26 |
Islander and Marchmadness, Thanks for reading and commenting! Toccatta |
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