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zaaclindsay
Member

since 2009-08-12

Posts 111
Ottawa Ontario

0 posted 2009-08-19 11:17 AM

So many things I wanna say
Too many stories to be told
But it doesn’t matter anyway
Cause it just leaves me
Feelin old

I wonder how to tell the story
That no one wants to hear
Unless it has a happy ending
Love comes disguised as fear

Soft words unspoken
Drifting on the wind
Just a sentimental token
Of things I’ve lost
And where I’ve been

Just soft words unspoken
Cause they don’t wanna listen
So I just sit and count the echoes
Of soft words unspoken

Just wanted someone to listen
To the longings of my heart
But the words fell short of wisdom
And they’d never come out right

I never meant to cause the scars
By words spoken in confusion
I was only trying to find my way
To the end of the illusion

So these soft words unspoken
Keep drifting on the wind
Just a sentimental token
Of things I’ve lost
And where I’ve been

Just soft words unspoken
But they don’t wanna listen
And I’m tired of the echoes
Of soft words unspoken

Yes, I’m tired of the echoes…
of soft words unspoken

I kept wondering why that frisbee kept getting bigger and bigger....and then it hit me.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2009-08-19 07:38 PM

These are fine song lyrics, in case you didn't think of it as such. I can hear a guitar, a bass, and an alto sax. Seriously, this has lyrical potential, just needs a little tightening.
Maybe say soft words spoken rather than unspoken? It's hard to grasp 'unspoken' words drifting on the wind. Just a suggestion.

Possible refrain:

"Soft words (un)spoken
Drifting on the wind
Just a sentimental token
Of things I’ve lost

***WOW, I hadn't read your profile before replying.
So you are into music and lyrics already. It shows.

And where I’ve been"

zaaclindsay
Member

since 2009-08-12

Posts 111
Ottawa Ontario

2 posted 2009-08-20 01:42 AM

yep, i'm into music. i wrote it with unspoken cuz at the time i felt like an old soul with sentiments and musings i'd never shared, but had been told many times it showed in my eyes...mostly sad then.

this piece wasnt really intended to be lyrics...just fell out of my head that way.

thanks,

zaac

I kept wondering why that frisbee kept getting bigger and bigger....and then it hit me.

Dens Girl
New Member

since 2009-08-20

Posts 3
Ky

3 posted 2009-08-20 03:44 PM

I like this. I think we have all been to this place at one point or another. Nice piece of work here.

~Dara loves Dennis~

zaaclindsay
Member

since 2009-08-12

Posts 111
Ottawa Ontario

4 posted 2009-08-20 06:07 PM

thank you dens girl. this is a pretty cool place, so welcome...i'm a newbie too.

zaac

I kept wondering why that frisbee kept getting bigger and bigger....and then it hit me.

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