Open Poetry #45 |
Like a Moth to the Flame |
martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Was it me or her combustibility Things seemed to be moving right along being close sharing beginning to open and suddenly unexpectedly the walls go up she withdraws after some distance what was closing is now a chasm she won't speak hiding behind lines in distant chilled robotic sentences maintaining a distance in her vocabulary vernacular as if my feelings were a string litany of facts |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Interesting poem. Maybe the 'wall' is her way of putting out a billboard that she is simply not interested. Alison |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
do most women ask you to sit by them at the pool and read them your poetry if they aren't interested? |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I don't know. As a woman, it's not something I ever considered doing or have had asked of me. My comment was directed to your poem, not your love life - unless they are one and the same. A |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
they are |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Okay, sometimes mine aren't so I don't assume that everyone's is about them. I can see my original comment could get your back up. I am sorry. However, I am happy that I feel that kind of response from your poetry. It shows it got to me. That's a good thing, right? I read your words. I react to a feeling that they give me. And I think - I enjoy your poetry. Have a good one - and good luck. A |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Thanks, I think thats probably the best compliment or comment one could ask for |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Hey I enjoyed this one Brad. A age ole question men have been asking for years "what did i do?" If you figure it out..email me the answer maybe it will help me too. you wrote this one well. Yoin |
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