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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan 
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Sometimes Sometimes, When its all to much, I pull the darkness over me, stick my bruised hands right in and cleanse myself with the anger. I paint my face with the pain and walk down these dirty streets with my head low and let the guilt just splash out of my boots. There are times when I get good and drunk and my mind gets a little fuzzy. I just stand here with the beer running down my belly and look at you laughing there in the picture on the wall. Sometimes, when its real quiet and there isn’t enough anger or I cant drink enough beer to hide all the pain, I just sit here alone and watch the rain. Yoin [This message has been edited by Yoinn (08-12-2009 09:41 PM).] |
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Dreamer05 Junior Member
since 2009-06-23
Posts 30Kansas |
Absolutely wonderful! I especially love the images I get when I read the first stanza. As always you've done a great job. I look forward to reading more of your work.  ~Dreamer05~ |
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GBride Senior Member
since 2009-07-02
Posts 538 |
Sounds like your going through a rough patch. Chicken fried steak, with a ton of mashed potatoes, and a quart of milk won't fix your problems but you will feel a lot better. Don't forget hot apple pie with a slice of melted cheese on top. |
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crosscountry83 Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 345 |
 your making me hungry. I would just keep doing what your doing -writing poetry.Rileigh |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
How painful to not be able to anesthetize the wounds. You break my heart with this one, I think perhaps because I've seen anger turned inward that way so many times, and the silence is deep like waiting for a volcano to erupt. You have a way of making the lines speak in a real way for your reader. ~KL |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Sometimes your poetry just amazes me it stops me short commands me to read and feel the pain and I do feel the pain of each word Sometiems I am just in awe. Alison |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Thank you Dreamer for your kind words. Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Hey now your talking Gbride. You sound like you know how to get through a "rough patch" just fine. Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
I will keep at it Riliegh I promise. Now go make yourself a sandwich. Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Thank you Lassy. I always enjoy your kind replies. Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
My Dear Alison, You flatter me much. Sorry about the pain but I am glad you liked it. yoin |
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crosscountry83 Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 345 |
*bump* just thought this poem should be read more... Rileigh |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
You certainly know how to tell it like it is, Yoinn. Ida |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Yoinn - very expressive write, and felt the pain when reading... Wish you well... BC |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
The only way I know how Ida. thanks for your reply. Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Bill and James. thank you gentlemen for taking the time to reply. I am thankful. Yoin |
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