Open Poetry #45 |
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Through Jaded Eyes (villanelle from the workshop) |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England ![]() |
Through jaded eyes; in love there's pain, The ruin kept for young of heart, As wisdom makes its scorn so plain. What solace will to us remain, When aged do their doom impart? Through jaded eyes; in love there's pain. Salvation can we hope to gain, By playing each tormented part? As wisdom makes its scorn so plain. Devotion's warmth can we retain, Or will we bleed, and drift apart? Through jaded eyes; in love there's pain. The youthful plight of sorrow's stain, Our bitter end, though sweet our start, As wisdom makes its scorn so plain. Will apathy forever reign? Our shallow lust our only art? Through jaded eyes; in love there's pain, As wisdom makes its scorn so plain. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, Luke, this exquisite Villanelle was achingly sad ~ yet beautifully penned. Love & Healing Hugs, Linda ![]() |
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Kaoru![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Beautiful, achingly so. That last verse? So deeply wounding! Very much enjoyed this work. |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
This is beautiful, Suncleaver. |
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Falling rain![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Brilliant like always. -Zach |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Beautiful. I love Villanelles and this is beautiful. Alison |
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