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What Happened in the Piney Woods
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What Happened in the Piney Woods |
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Callista Member
since 2008-10-05
Posts 63USA |
I knowed we shouldn't of went that way. That trail weren't meant for no VW Bug. But I didn't even stop you, didn't even try. Now muddy ole me's in a worrisome rut counting the whippoorwill's call while you sleep like an innocent oblivious to it all. Hit ain't a fer piece home. Around the hill and over that ridge, where mama's waiting a'wringing her hands 'cause she knows what a mama knows. I'm six steps towards twenty and yore sleepin' body's warm. I patiently plait my hair and listen to the whippoorwill's song. Soft wings part the air, which rings with prophesy "Whippoorwill, will, will..." "round and 'round my head. This much I know is true: Its treasure's nested in the grass, Mine, precious, by my side. Taint fearful in these piney woods, I thank what brung me here. "The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ, |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Wonderful. I love the vernacular and the story. You wrote this very well - Alison |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I knowed we shouldn't of went that way. That trail weren't meant for no VW Bug." ~ Where's a stretch limo whenyas needs one!?! "mama's waiting a'wringing her hands 'cause she knows what a mama knows." ~ Ain't that the troooth! A sorry tale ~ well told!  EA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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GBride Senior Member
since 2009-07-02
Posts 538 |
This is very well written. You have the voice. I, for one, would like to hear more of this. I will remember your sitename |
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GBride Senior Member
since 2009-07-02
Posts 538 |
This is very well written. You have the voice. I, for one, would like to hear more of this. I will remember your sitename |
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Callista Member
since 2008-10-05
Posts 63USA |
I am still learning the ins and outs of this site. Please forgive any faux pas. I truly appreciate the comments. Alison-My writer's group got me interested in the vernacular, and this is my 1st attempt. Thanks for the encouragement. EA- How aptly you switch from dialect to dialect. I am sure I could learn a trick or two from you. GBride- Thanks for your time and kindness. My goal is to get on this site more often and check out more poets. I am a neophyte, as you can tell. James- Appreciate it. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
You made it easy to connect and become the character. Well done ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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