Open Poetry #45 |
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Midnight grey. |
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Windhover Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 179UK |
One More from the "Love Affair that didn't quite make it" series. ![]() In the lonely midnight hour, they say all cats... and thoughts, are grey; it doesn't matter what our hopes and dreams were; they are all lost now. The memories persist... dead petals swirling in confused array blowing through my mind again, as I sit here, and wonder how it came to this; this Supernova once shared... but now, ice-encased; our shooting star burnt out and tumbled; cindered in the blackest hole of recognising "We're all through," plain read, deep in the frozen wastes of your impassive gaze; The grey thoughts creep and wend, and take their toll. There is no point to curse the bed we made; to walk the line so fine t'wixt love and hate; I must take care... for such a web here, I could weave; I must look towards the dawn; tomorrow perhaps, the sun may shine; there was no-one to hear, or care if I cried, when I stood, and watched you leave. But, if I always look behind me; then all that I shall ever see is... the shadow of our past; soft slinking... trailing, furtively. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
"there was no-one to hear, or care if I cried, when I stood, and watched you leave." I have also lived this moment...beautiful job! |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Nicely done, poet. Grey has a way of setting the tone sometimes...or perhaps, the tone/setting brings the grey into sharp focus. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
so sad....I think that is the saddest love ever, to met the love of your life and never be together, just like Jack and Rose from the titanic....or to love someone so deeply and they never love back.....the ghost of what might have been, always haunts you... ~ARH |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I loved this best when I read it out loud. Very beautiful. Alison |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
as always, VERY well written! "In the lonely midnight hour, they say all cats... and thoughts, are grey; it doesn't matter what our hopes and dreams were; they are all lost now. The memories persist... dead petals swirling in confused array blowing through my mind again, as I sit here, and wonder how it came to this..." ... well, that about 'sums up' my (alleged) 'life' rather effectively! MUCH (sustained) applause for this 'penning' !! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
One can feel the loneliness and despair in the "grey" and yet beautiful poem. Ida |
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Billie Cullimore Member
since 2009-03-27
Posts 315 |
You need a hug. As most of us do. But my dear, you are never alone. "Seek and ye shall find." God is always near. Here is a hug from me. Billie C. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
That pain and sadness can create such beauty as this poem, is one of the many little miracles that we miss along the way. I particularly love the first line. I am sorry that you are feeling so sad. Owl |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
there was no-one to hear, or care if I cried, when I stood, and watched you leave. The loneliness and regrets wrap around me like a mist as I read... and shiver my own regrets. Stunning write! |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
Well...hello there again D. I see that I commented on this when you first posted. Must say I enjoyed the second read as well! Outstanding writing Shellie . flesh, blood, bone, love...twisted |
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