all i need is an answer - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Teen Poetry #9

all i need is an answer

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

0 posted 2010-01-16 07:27 AM

So mum I have a question
I'm not sure you want to hear
But I need to know the answer
And please let it be sincere

I used to believe your tales
But now they’re growing sheer
At first I blamed myself
Maybe I wasn’t being clear?

But then I’d rephrase the question
In attempt to break your frontier
But you’d just rearrange the lie
In hope I wouldn’t persevere

So mum now I’ll ask the question
Please don’t be burdened by your fear
But is it true that my real father
Is not the same man who’s standing here?

Inside this exterior, over which the eye might have roved there was the record of a pulsing life, which had learnt too well for its years – Thomas Har

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2010-01-17 12:48 PM

Leanne,

This is really powerful. You gripped me with the first stanza and held me to the last line.

A

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

2 posted 2010-01-17 01:58 AM

What a impression this leaves on my heart! How many people do not know their roots? I knew of mine, but from a distance. I recall the questions I had vividly. It's such a hard question for a parent to face when it's been shelved for the life of a child. How necessary to be as honest as possible...and remain protective, too, sometimes. ~KL

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

3 posted 2010-01-17 06:34 AM

thankyou both very much for your comments! i appreciate the feedback.
-Lee

madelyn
Member

since 2009-09-03

Posts 172
Purgatory

4 posted 2010-01-17 09:50 PM

This one sent cold shivers down my spine even through it is really hot here.

Great write, really good.

Hope to see more like it in the future.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.