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Raging Storm
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Raging Storm |
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UNTAMEDelegance Member
since 2009-05-30
Posts 222Oregon |
A mournful wind, a haunting sound as is blows past the barren ground. The clouds above, a grey, silk gown the rain comes and starts falling down. The heaven's tears, so sad, they weep for sunny days that sky can't keep. The haunting sound the sharp winds make The rain pours down, the heavens break. The lightning strikes in static mirth that blithely mocks the muddy earth. It starts to flood a town nearby A child awakes to waters high. Her screams are drowning in the rain A cry of melancholy pain. A home destroyed, a city gone before the tempest's rage is done. The rain, now stopped; the onslaught dimmed Leaving only howling wind. [This message has been edited by UNTAMEDelegance (01-11-2010 12:42 AM).] |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Beautifully rhymed and you set the scene perfectly. You may wish to change a typo though to make it flow in the readers mind. A home destroyes, a city gone |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Ooh, this is awesome. I really like it! Wonderful rhyme! and Nice flow! “All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde |
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