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Snow_Angel
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since 2009-12-18
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0 posted 2009-12-18 07:58 PM


As a stone you sit
Death in your eyes
Your mask never faltering
Never coming alive
Only somewhere your puppet master pulls your strings


You think that you're helping by not telling me things
But really you keep it inside
Letting the pain eat you away
Finally making you to numb to focus
Drifting into the nothingness of hurt


Like a child with a scab you pick at the pain
Making it hurt
As if it's the only way you know you're alive


Don't do this to yourself
Don't do this to me
I can't handle it
But I can't give up


(I don't really like the title. Any suggestions?)

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1 posted 2009-12-18 08:17 PM


Hi, and welcome to Passions.  This was an all too familiar plea from a lot of people with best friends needing guidance.  Well done.  I think a good title would be "Empathy"


Leanne <3
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since 2007-08-25
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N.S.W, Australia
2 posted 2009-12-19 07:53 PM


i know so many people like this, whose strength is their own weakness, great poem!
-Lee

Snow_Angel
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since 2009-12-18
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3 posted 2009-12-26 05:04 PM


Thanks.
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