Teen Poetry #9 |
The Waiting Game. |
Leanne <3 Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216N.S.W, Australia |
I’ve put the kids to bed Kissed them both goodnight Told them you’d be home soon Praying; please let it be tonight. The loneliness surrounds me As I falter to the floor The beds been made for months now Since the day you went to war. The floor boards scream with silence Echoing through my veins, I wait for the sound of your footsteps But the heartbreaking static remains. My body grows tired But my heart can’t help but wait Wishing praying hoping praying That this war is not your fate. I peel myself from the floor As begins another day Fooling myself once again; I tell the mirror: I am okay. Inside this exterior, over which the eye might have roved there was the record of a pulsing life, which had learnt too well for its years – Thomas Har |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I hate to think how many women are waking tomorrow morning with these exact same thoughts. I can't think of any more powerless thing that war. A very well done and poignant poem. |
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Leanne <3 Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216N.S.W, Australia |
Thanks heaps. I agree, theres nothing quite as devastating as a war, and those left behind. |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
WOW i love this.. so honest and raw.. you're an amazing writer.. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
beautiful write hon. Krysti |
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Leanne <3 Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216N.S.W, Australia |
thankyou for your comments much appreciated. xx |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am enjoying your words~~ M |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
"The floor boards scream with silence Echoing through my veins, I wait for the sound of your footsteps But the heartbreaking static remains." My favorite stanza |
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Leanne <3 Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216N.S.W, Australia |
thankyou guys |
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precious pearls Member
since 2009-07-24
Posts 110NJ; United States |
def. one of the best on here!!! so much emotion, so much pain.... so much sorrow... i love how you put everything flowing and i commend you on being strong for your children -kai |
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Stitches Member
since 2009-11-27
Posts 159United Kingdom |
Lovely, Captures that vain hope, strength and selflessness perfectly I think. 'I feel like an animal, and I don't think that I get it. But one day I'll see you around.' |
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ThatOneGuy Junior Member
since 2009-10-27
Posts 33Indiana, United States |
that is really really good. i know a lot of people close to me at war right now and that really spoke to me. You are a very good writer |
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m48 Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 108 |
what a story. like novel id read more of.also your strength i amazing. |
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