Teen Poetry #9 |
In the End |
Ravagence Member
since 2009-08-16
Posts 79 |
The world is being ripped apart person by person, country by country; and guess what it's called? War. It's all about getting the gold. Your parents tell you that it's just a game, But they are playing for the #1 parent, and in the end someone gets hurt: You. Across the sea, there's a war. We try to help, but in the end, someone gets hurt: Families. On the global scale, It's about who has the most land, from ancient rome, to the germans in World War 2. And in the end, someone gets hurt: Everbody. Next time you hear about a war, don't turn a blind eye, don't gape with your mouth open, don't even bother with the gossip. Just pray. And in the end someone gets hurt: Satan. ____Separate Endings____ Next time you hear about a war, don't turn a blind eye, don't gape with your mouth open, don't even bother with the gossip. Just pray. And in the end someone comes home. +++OR+++ No ending Stanza at all. ::Attention:: Which Ending is best? Thanks for Support |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
My thoughts are: wars don't just exist elsewhere. However, its great that you look beyond the scope of where ever you may be. As for the ending, I'd go with the second ending, or no ending at all. Thanks for sharing! There is power in the pen. |
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priyanka Member
since 2009-06-15
Posts 216india |
"Sigh" In the end someone does get hurt... nice write... |
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