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nehematala
Member

since 2009-05-21

Posts 129

0 posted 2009-07-01 06:26 PM

I wrote this for my friend Kaylan, Her 18 year old "boyfriend" got her pregnant when she was 14 but she decided not to press charges, to take the hard rode and have the baby and then she decided to keep her. It may be hard but the right road is never easy.

Stolen from her
The Kiss she was saving
For the one
Her heart will belong to
For the rest of her life

You took from her
The security she once had
You used her when
Life had already stolen
The only hope she had

When she told you the news
You just ran
What a coward you are
Can't even take responsibility
For what you did

If you had stuck around
To help her
You would know
That she doesn't hate you
For what you did
You gave her the best thing
In her life

Her beautiful baby girl
No daddy to care for her
But she will be okay
Her mommy loves her
No matter what

The number one thing in acting is honesty: If you can fake that you've got it made.

priyanka
Member

since 2009-06-15

Posts 216
india

1 posted 2009-07-03 07:15 AM

now this was really good... It is indeed sad about what had happened... But the your friend is indeed very brave... That was a beautiful thing she did... She did not shrink from her responsibility like many others... God bless her...

And regarding your poem I must say that this one was perfectly good... I don't know but I have this feeling that the last line dosen't go too well with the flow.. But then again... Im a little off the ground and I could be wrong...

nehematala
Member

since 2009-05-21

Posts 129

2 posted 2009-07-05 09:32 PM

I think You are right about the last line but I am not sure if I should put something else there or just leave it off.
What do you think?

The number one thing in acting is honesty: If you can fake that you've got it made.

the_inner_me11
Junior Member

since 2009-05-12

Posts 15

3 posted 2009-07-17 12:36 PM

I really liked this.
Im kinda unsure about the last line, it threw me off a little.

Peanutbuttercookies'nmilk
Junior Member

since 2009-05-03

Posts 31
Terrell,Texas

4 posted 2009-07-17 01:26 PM

I know exactly what she's going through I have a cousin who went through the same thing.

We are all unique in Jesus' eyes.

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