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The Story of Forever
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The Story of Forever |
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kindredspirit Member
since 2009-05-19
Posts 156 |
i've heard the story of forever a circle without end beneath the shadows in his smile and lovers playing pretend i've told the story of forever through eyes that turn astray and hands that seek forgiveness while pushing you away you mocked our love a fairy tale wrote me down to dust tore away the hidden veil exposed translucent lust staring through a prism that reveals the face of light our bond means nothing more then the words you bled that night. |
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meganne_77 Junior Member
since 2009-04-15
Posts 14Oklahoma |
good job. i loved the rhythm and the flow. Barbie |
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kindredspirit Member
since 2009-05-19
Posts 156 |
Thankyou  I appreciate the feedback. |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Excellent flow, I lost myself in the sheer rhythm of you're words! Also I love the imagery of shadow's in smiles... To fly is to fall and miss the sidewalk -Douglas Adams |
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~frustrated writer~ Member
since 2008-02-25
Posts 84 |
cool piece! ^^ |
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rockangel_gv Junior Member
since 2008-03-29
Posts 43 |
good write |
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