Teen Poetry #9 |
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Spiralling |
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Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
It's been a while. Have been museless for ages. Spiralling Running, fleeing, pounding feet Running senseless without beat Never stop to look behind Eyes are open but running blind Racing on, stitch by my side Narrowed eyes turning wide Stuck in a moment, caught in time High on motion it feels sublime Thoughts are trampled underfoot Mind is spiralling, won’t stay put Arms outstretched towards the past Slow by head, feet think too fast Tripping, falling, fallen down Failing now to stand our ground Face to sky and earth to cheek Blinking at the world oblique Lying, spinning, underneath Frowning down with crooked teeth Smile frozen in the descent Thoughts are crushed, breath is spent Running, fleeing, broken feet Running senseless within defeat Never stopping, never still If I don’t stop then no one will. |
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nehematala Member
since 2009-05-21
Posts 129 |
Wow this is really good If your parents never had children, chances are you won't, either. |
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priyanka Member
since 2009-06-15
Posts 216india |
stopping turning looking back and learning easy to say but hard to do... your right...can't help but tripping and falling don't know when i will learn to weave the threads the right way! p.s. your poem say sit all...lovely |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
This is really good, but I just can't get over all the "ing's" The hardest part about writing poetry, |
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