Teen Poetry #9 |
Betrayal |
meganne_77 Junior Member
since 2009-04-15
Posts 14Oklahoma |
the betrayal piercing words that stabbed Me like swords. tore My heart in two tore My world down Me, crying not believing the words I am hearing, not believing you would betray Me the way you did piercing words that stabbed Me like swords tore Me in two Burned My heart My soul you didnt care if I was hurting or not. Me, crying realizing the truth You betrayed Me, killed My heart and hurt Me so I am forever crying on the inside I didn't believe you world hurt Me but you did. Barbie |
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meganne_77 Junior Member
since 2009-04-15
Posts 14Oklahoma |
This is my first poem please comment.. |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Hi meganne This is obviously a very heartfelt poem. Hopefully you will continue posting here. The people are nice, and you might learn a lot too. Lots of Welcomes to Passions in Poetry M |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Welcome to Pip!!! Nice poem, I can really relate. You laugh because I'm different... |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Welcome to Passions It's great to see you posting here . I look forward to reading more of your poetry and your responses. Hopefully we can all learn and enjoy together. (Please check your e-mail for a special greeting). All the best. Rob - Moderator/Passions in Poetry |
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Kalysta Junior Member
since 2009-04-02
Posts 41Ohio |
Hey a good first write. Its nice to have you at PIP. Keep writing. ~Kalysta~ ~Kalysta~ |
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nehematala Member
since 2009-05-21
Posts 129 |
i can't relate to this poem (yet) but its really good |
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Rosie_Orange Junior Member
since 2009-04-20
Posts 46South Africa |
love the format! honest yet brutal... i like it |
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meganne_77 Junior Member
since 2009-04-15
Posts 14Oklahoma |
Thank you everybody for critiquing my poem. I had lost my internet but, I'm back! Thanks for the comments. Barbie |
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