Teen Poetry #9 |
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Open Happiness |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada ![]() |
Based on the song "Open Happiness" by tons of different artists that made the "Coca-Cola" commercial, lol...this is an attempt, and only that, lol. Nothing good really came from it. __________________________________________________________ Mmmmmm... and with a simple sound, we stretch our arms and reach. Reach for the stars. The harder you look, your eyes focus and its clear. Clear that the stars are close, so close you can feel their heat. The warmth spreads through your limbs and around your body. A heavenly feeling. Nothing else matters, you have this sense of open-ness, a feeling of open happiness. The stars start to dance. Dancing down the street, smiles on everyone's faces. The sunshine sings its song, and the clouds rain with joy. It's a brand new day, time for some more open happiness. Another smile on someone's face, another rainbow bridge. Thank you stars for making the world happy together. This is a better way of living, this is open happiness. julianna |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
I quite liked it Julianna. ![]() |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
thanks luke. julianna |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
mmm... Some parts i liked.. some i didn't... i think the whole thing is def not your best... but still a good write.. x |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
yeah, i know. i wrote this because i was really hyper. and listening to this song made me inspired. everytime i read it over, i keep finding more and more places where it could've been better, lol... thanks for the "critique"! julianna |
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