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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN 
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Bound The night is in pursuit again, through these alleyways confined by buildings sagging like gallows in a nuclear wind. It moves quicker with steps so silent as to put a mute to shame. It's pulse becomes electric as it sways from side to side dodging delusional derelicts. The darkness swallows swollen shadows and hems my path to home. My pulse becomes electric. My lungs drink despair. The combination provides reason to move to the beat insisted by the hangman's secret. It's a violent dance. Two pulses meet, Two sparks fly. This beat becomes electric, bloated by two tangled together. The darkness and myself, sensual in all senses, becoming more so by the minute. The beat is pounding in my head though no one else seems to be moved. The night seems to insist on continuing this carnal spar. For the moment, I agree. |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
After reading this, I started humming to myself. It was like I was keeping the dark away with my humming...Lol, just sharing how some of the things I got from this. I really liked it. Especially the two pulses and two sparks. There is power in the pen. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
It's always encouraging when poems have an effect on the reader. Humming is cool.  |
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crimsonXnails Member
since 2008-02-10
Posts 108dark/little/heavan.:*:. |
*sigh*... now i remember why i miss this place. excellent as always! !tracey! |
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crimsonXnails Member
since 2008-02-10
Posts 108dark/little/heavan.:*:. |
*sigh*... now i remember why i miss this place. excellent as always! !tracey! if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
Oh boy, two posts! Thanks tracey! |
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crimsonXnails Member
since 2008-02-10
Posts 108dark/little/heavan.:*:. |
lol, srry, 'twas an accident, but it deserved 2! |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
Haha...It's ok! It makes it look like I've got a ton of replies, maybe more people will read it then! |
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crimsonXnails Member
since 2008-02-10
Posts 108dark/little/heavan.:*:. |
well they'd better or they'll have to face with the terrible wrath of the feary queen(aka: me tossing them a dirty look)!! mwahahahahaha! im very uh... hyper i guess you could call it, this evening. srry<3 !tracey! if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Alex you know I'd always read your poems! This poem deserves a really creepy backtrack, like thriller! (oh yeah sorry about the implied comparison to Micheal Jaxson...it couldn't be helped) My melancholy is purely my own |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
"as it sways from side to side dodging delusional derelicts." I read that and got shivers down my spine. lol very good work. -Zach When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
Thank you all for reading. I really do appreciate it. Ty reading this while listening to Southern Comfort by Burial. It's what inspired it. |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
amazing write. the words you used flow so well and everything works incredible. the meaning is astounding, great job!! library..  .:~]Julianna[~:. |
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