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Teen Poetry #9

Need help with title

prettypinkrebel
Member

since 2007-11-07

Posts 104

0 posted 2009-02-20 10:18 AM

SOOOO not my best write!! but thanks

As ready as I am for you, as much As i really care,
your feelings change for me everyday I realize you will never really be there
You spoke the words I love you and told me this felt right
Then said goodbye in the mdst of the twilight.
I still dont understand the way your mind changes and I probably never will.
This pain it hurts and yes it's real the way I feel
it wont change I love you
your just not ready to love me too

kiwie15:D
Junior Member

since 2009-03-05

Posts 13
california

1 posted 2009-03-11 11:12 PM

okay this one i really do love. i have been going through the same thing. and this line "You spoke the words I love you and told me this felt right
Then said goodbye in the mdst of the twilight." is my favorite.. i am a big twilight fan..well anyways your first four words i think should be you title

always
kiwie

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2009-03-12 08:14 AM

I agree. This was pretty good. Keep it up.

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

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