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Teen Poetry #9

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maddorani
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since 2007-11-18

Posts 423
houston,tx

0 posted 2012-09-12 10:36 PM

This is not finished yet i just want opinions on this piece and let me know if it sounds like a poem than the story mode. And i guess that's it please take the time to read this and let me know this is just a rough draft once its finished I will make it better. so please let me know and thanks

Anxious for the first day

I can't sleep.
I'm nervous.
I'm apprehensive.
my heart is palpitating.
In my mind I'm thinking.....
Will I be able to make friends?
will I like it here?
what are my teachers like?
My mind is just.....all jumbled up!

My 1st day

i wake up
change my clothes
and get on the bus
finally I reached the school
within 10 minutes
the bell rang
ding ding ding

My first period

I reached my class
Just in time
I sat down on my seat
And started looking around
The spacious room
With my perky eyes
Just wondering.....wondering away
Until i see my teacher

When I saw him

I never expected my teacher
to be
Young
Handsome
and muscular.-
His facial features
especially his
icy blue eyes
that make me feel as if
my soul is being pierced through

Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana

1 posted 2015-10-15 01:18 AM

quote:
My first period

I reached my class
Just in time
I sat down on my seat
And started looking around

...Nature's way isn't always on schedule.

88's friend

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

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