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introspection of this outer perfection
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN 
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in a introspection of this outer perfection the only one with problems is me i cant seem to put down what i want to this pen is escaping me the words formulate on my tounge the taste is too bittersweet like the smell of an old book with wisdom lost in its chapters every page has a lesson in life and every life lesson leaves me wondering tattered pieces of paper crumpled into nothing there the long lost letters you never chose to send with true feelings and fears these tears come without warning |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
Not what I thought was ur best, but enjoyed. Only suggestion is this: I thought that a space after the first 4 lines would be good. There is power in the pen. |
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