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Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
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Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2009-02-08 11:59 AM



in a introspection of this outer perfection
the only one with problems is me
i cant seem to put down what i want to
this pen is escaping me
the words formulate on my tounge
the taste is too bittersweet
like the smell of an old book
with wisdom lost in its chapters
every page has a lesson in life
and every life lesson leaves me wondering


tattered pieces of paper
crumpled into nothing
there the long lost letters
you never chose to send
with true feelings and fears
these tears come without warning

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Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23
Posts 330
that So Cal
1 posted 2009-02-12 02:44 AM


Not what I thought was ur best, but enjoyed. Only suggestion is this: I thought that a space after the first 4 lines would be good.

There is power in the pen.

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