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Octave
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since 2008-07-29
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Highlands, Scotland.

0 posted 2011-06-16 03:42 PM


It's been a while. This is the first poem I've written in months so excuse its immaturity and lack of refinement. C&C very much welcome.

Frankenstein

Something’s happened to me
Or worse, happening
It’s dark and wet and twisted
It’s a salty, spiteful thing

It’s unfurling from within me
With a startling, knowing grace
I’m caged between its talons
And shadow ridden face

It blossoms in my words
In sickening, silver beads
And glitters in my thoughts
And my subtle, scaling deeds

It breeds fear and paranoia
And spreads like a disease
Its boils lurch inside me
It ignores my feeble pleas

It’s choking and inhaling
And destroying every piece
Of every sliver of my being
In one easy, greedy feat

It’s whole and huge and echoing
And self righteous on its throne
Inside my head and on my skin
It’s a creation of my own.

© Copyright 2011 Octave - All Rights Reserved
teamfinnick
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since 2011-08-15
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1 posted 2011-08-15 02:27 AM


Woah. I love it. Its so amazing and just like my favorite song. I like this one a lot!
rachel_anubis
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since 2011-03-24
Posts 43

2 posted 2011-08-23 05:01 AM


This poem was amazing. Enough said.
Octave
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since 2008-07-29
Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.
3 posted 2011-08-28 07:16 AM


Wow, thank you so much.
madelyn
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since 2009-09-03
Posts 172
Purgatory
4 posted 2011-09-04 08:51 PM


Loved it. Great rhythm.

Hope to read more of this standard.


M

Sadness, like happiness, has its own majestic beauty and must be embraced as a valid emotion, not pushed down as an abnormality.

Haf_Alive
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since 2011-09-04
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High in the Sky
5 posted 2011-09-04 09:59 PM


that was actually amazing.  summed it up and brought it all out with the last line, right in our faces.  skills.  thanks

HAF

Octave
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since 2008-07-29
Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.
6 posted 2011-09-07 10:42 AM


Wow, thank you very much!
priyanka
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since 2009-06-15
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india
7 posted 2011-10-03 08:49 PM


Just awesome! Well said!
Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror
8 posted 2019-01-23 01:05 AM


I liked the poem, but I'm just a little taken back by the use of "Frankenstein" as the title.

I mean, it is the title of Mary Wollstonecraft Shelley's book.
I know that's easy to forget, even though it's well known.  

...just bein' Bluesy

priyanka
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since 2009-06-15
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india
9 posted 2019-11-05 05:17 AM


Wow, wow woow

Such symphony to those words.

Your poem is so beautiful. Reading it reminded me of my darkness. I think everyone will connect in their own way to this poem.

Lovely


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