Frankenstein - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Octave
Member

since 2008-07-29

Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.

0 posted 2011-06-16 03:42 PM

It's been a while. This is the first poem I've written in months so excuse its immaturity and lack of refinement. C&C very much welcome.

Frankenstein

Something’s happened to me
Or worse, happening
It’s dark and wet and twisted
It’s a salty, spiteful thing

It’s unfurling from within me
With a startling, knowing grace
I’m caged between its talons
And shadow ridden face

It blossoms in my words
In sickening, silver beads
And glitters in my thoughts
And my subtle, scaling deeds

It breeds fear and paranoia
And spreads like a disease
Its boils lurch inside me
It ignores my feeble pleas

It’s choking and inhaling
And destroying every piece
Of every sliver of my being
In one easy, greedy feat

It’s whole and huge and echoing
And self righteous on its throne
Inside my head and on my skin
It’s a creation of my own.

teamfinnick
New Member

since 2011-08-15

Posts 1

1 posted 2011-08-15 02:27 AM

Woah. I love it. Its so amazing and just like my favorite song. I like this one a lot!

rachel_anubis
Junior Member

since 2011-03-24

Posts 43

2 posted 2011-08-23 05:01 AM

This poem was amazing. Enough said.

Octave
Member

since 2008-07-29

Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.

3 posted 2011-08-28 07:16 AM

Wow, thank you so much.

madelyn
Member

since 2009-09-03

Posts 172
Purgatory

4 posted 2011-09-04 08:51 PM

Loved it. Great rhythm.

Hope to read more of this standard.

M

Sadness, like happiness, has its own majestic beauty and must be embraced as a valid emotion, not pushed down as an abnormality.

Haf_Alive
Member

since 2011-09-04

Posts 56
High in the Sky

5 posted 2011-09-04 09:59 PM

that was actually amazing. summed it up and brought it all out with the last line, right in our faces. skills. thanks

HAF

Octave
Member

since 2008-07-29

Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.

6 posted 2011-09-07 10:42 AM

Wow, thank you very much!

priyanka
Member

since 2009-06-15

Posts 216
india

7 posted 2011-10-03 08:49 PM

Just awesome! Well said!

Bluesy Socrateaser
Member Elite

since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

8 posted 2019-01-23 01:05 AM

I liked the poem, but I'm just a little taken back by the use of "Frankenstein" as the title.

I mean, it is the title of Mary Wollstonecraft Shelley's book.
I know that's easy to forget, even though it's well known.

...just bein' Bluesy

priyanka
Member

since 2009-06-15

Posts 216
india

9 posted 2019-11-05 05:17 AM

Wow, wow woow

Such symphony to those words.

Your poem is so beautiful. Reading it reminded me of my darkness. I think everyone will connect in their own way to this poem.

Lovely

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.