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Let Me Go
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Let Me Go |
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Joshkt Junior Member
since 2011-02-09
Posts 12 |
Here I go again Back to this same thing again As we start to spin Lose control of the vision in our head The collision of our two worlds start But we're falling apart I wanna get back on my feet now Stand up to a brand new beat Say it, I dont need you anymore I dont need you anymore Im stuck in this nightmare I cant prepare for whats gonna happen to me next I'm so perplexed at how one simple action can change your reaction to how I come off to you You control my mind you control my actions Im gonna try and rewind but its not gonna happen As these demons start clapping I try to barter my soul away but I just cant give it away these easily, its seems so easy just talking bout it but once you get to that situation, the apparation starts coming to your mind, you go blind in rage fear love hate Oh god let me go. ~~ Everyone Deserves a Chance ~~ |
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frencesmae New Member
since 2011-01-07
Posts 9philippines |
nice one. i can relate with it  |
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HolsJoscelyne Junior Member
since 2011-04-05
Posts 23Colchester, United Kingdom |
So emotive and so powerful! Anyone who has experienced heartache or a doomed relationship could relate to this from being the victim who ends it to the person dumped who tries to hide from what they may have caused. I loved it, truly amazing! Holly Joscelyne poetry at dougthedreadpoetry.blogspot.com |
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LaGraceLa Member
since 2011-01-30
Posts 243Minnesota, USA |
Wow, that is like a slap in the face! Absolutist stunning. It had no apparent pattern or sence to it but it flowed beautifully all the same. The ending is what really got me, it was such a genuine cry for help and peace. I loved it, great job! |
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