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The Voice |
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madelyn Member
since 2009-09-03
Posts 172Purgatory |
*Madelyn She calls to me Listens until she knows I’m listening She tries again *Madelyn She calls to me Answers to exams Answers to thoughts Answers to everything Answers to everything but why… Why me? Who are you? What are you? How can I get rid of you? She ignores me. *Madelyn She calls to me Taunting me Daring me *Say I exsist *Say it, say it I can’t I won’t I don’t If I do She’ll take over Me My body My mind Even my soul *Madelyn She calls to me It isn’t real La,la, la I can’t hear anything La, la, la Struggling To conceal it To conceal her To conceal the confusion *Madelyn *Answer me honey, *I’m here to help *Protect *And Defend you *I am your guardian angel *Answer me sweetie *Madelyn She calls to me Lies Or The Truth? *Madelyn She calls to me She disrupts me In class At home Everywhere I can’t do it anymore She keeps me up at night With her constant chatter Even when she tries to make me sleep She fails *Madelyn She makes me feel… Violated *Madelyn She calls to me I toss and turn Pray to an imagianary god Who never answers I cry in desperation I want out I want it to stop I want it to go away I want it to die *Don’t cry darling, *I love you *I’ll help you *You’re safe with me With me? With her? When am I not with her?! Every breath I take She takes as well Every move I make She makes as well My thoughts Aren’t secret She listens in And adapts to my mood I hate her I love her I hate her I love her I want her gone But I don’t know how I’ll live Without her Is she apart of me? Like an arm or a leg? Or is she like a baby? Forever growing inside of me? Is this a test? Of indurance? Or is it torture? Mixed emotions… Swirling in my heart. Am I her mother Her daughter? Her sister? Her love? Her soul mate? Her teacher? Her student? Her island? Or am I her way into this world? Sometimes… She helps me, Saves me. She is my defensive stance, And my offencive attack. Confusion… I can’t but I can. I won’t but I will. I don’t but I do. Confusion… *Madelyn She calls to me She’s everywhere I sit in the corner, In the dark. My head in my hands, Praying it would all just stop. *Madelyn She calls to me Shut up! SHUT UP! I WANT MY OWN MIND! I WANT TO BE NORMAL! I don’t want to hear voices. *Madelyn She calls to me *I’m your best friend Yes, you are. But your also My worst enemy Confusion… Turns into insanity I give up She’s real I’m not strong Take my body, Take my mind. Just grant me one Small mercy: Leave my soul, Please. *Madelyn She calls to me I shriek in surprise She’s right near my ear. *I’m not the worst thing out there... |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear Madelyn, This is an interesting draft. If you want to leave it here, it could work well for you. Are you interested in taking it further by, for example, turning it into a dialogue poem. These sorts of things were more frequent in the middle ages, but they're still an interesting possibility — should you feel drawn to the possibility — of giving a voice in your poem for both the speaker and the Other, the voice which gets the speaker so rattled. It'd give you a chance to fill out both sides of the dialogue instead of simply giving voice to the frightened Speaker. It's possible to use the second voice either as part of the same poem or as a second poem written in response. It's also one of the ways that you can use a poem to help explore some of the things that you're busy feeling your way through at the time, and not getting bullied about by some of those more powerful cross currents that we can run across from time to time by listening to them, giving them a voice and allowing other parts of ourselves, as you so coirrectly point out, to talk back to them. Great and energetic piece. What's you're thinking about the center-justifying of the lines, by the way? I've tried writing that way from time to time, but it always seems to make my stuff more difficult on the eyes, and easier to put down for my readers. Are you experimenting with it, do you find it useful or what? I've gotten boring in my old age, and left justified my stuff, simply because it feels more accessable. I've gone back and forth on capitalizing the first word in my lines — I don't do it any more, but I did for years. Now I tend to write out the word "and" instead of using the ampersand ("&") which I used to love. Curiously, Bob Kaven |
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Amberzlynnc Member
since 2010-08-24
Posts 229New Jersey |
Wow.. I greatly enjoyed this! You have talent.  |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
I COULD NOT STOP READING THIS. I had to read to the end. Enjoyed. Ah, I hope you write another piece to respond to this - to justify the voice, what it might be. -Trina. |
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madelyn Member
since 2009-09-03
Posts 172Purgatory |
Please see The Girl (sequel to The Voice) if you enjoyed this. And now I lay me down to sleep, I pray the lord my soul to keep. And if I die before I wake, I pray the lord my soul to take. |
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