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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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In Love <3

0 posted 2010-07-22 01:49 AM



Your jacket hangs in my room,
Like your face hangs in my mind
Sometimes I can't believe that
You, of all, are mine

The night goes on, I find a reason
To stay up, to be awake
In the early morning
I see the dawn as it breaks

I begin to understand you
But the pieces don't connect
You are a puzzle to my being
My very state of mind

How should I react to your inconsistencies?
Am I more or less remembered?
Your silly simple ways keep me stilled
But I don't know what to do

Swimming in the dark
Like a goldfish in a box
That never knows there's light or day
I go on in never ending blindness

Rawr!!!!! (That means "I love you" in Dinosaur) :)

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freeand2sexy
Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704
CA, USA
1 posted 2010-08-16 06:28 PM


Good poem! Loved the last stanza the most!

"When I die, I want to go peacefully like my Grandfather did, in his sleep -- not screaming, like the passengers in his car"  
- Unknown

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
2 posted 2011-01-01 09:50 AM


Wow. I'm sorry if I appear harsh or brutal but this totally ROCKS!

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

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