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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
The way you hold me in your arms the way we fit so tight Your smile, touch, and manly charms got me loving this feelin tonight' They watch us dance across the floor we've danced the night away I slowly sneak us out the door And a lovely spot to end the day Moonlit path of golden sand feel it crumble at our feet you reach for my hand as we walk in synch with out heart beats I hope this isn't a summer romance A melody that sounds so real this is really my last chance I hope this is how, forever will feel |
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mozart4321 Junior Member
since 2010-06-29
Posts 29 |
i wish i could find someone like that! there are some grammar mistakes, but if they were intentional, thats completely understandable.  |
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*tori_rose* Junior Member
since 2010-10-12
Posts 44Weber City, VA |
i loved it you are very expressive, as in i can actually picture what you have written ~*tori*~ |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
For me the rhythm was slightly sketchy in places and I wonder if that's how you meant it to be because I know you are a great writer. The content was beautiful and I felt it well. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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