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GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

0 posted 2009-01-28 07:17 PM

You may have changed my style
and brightened up the view.
Yet, there’s still no smile
This isn’t me, but you.

My hair is lighter.
My heart’s still cold.
You say I’m brighter.
You’re voice is getting old.

I’ve never cared much
For your book of ethics.
I want out of your clutch,
But I’m in your gaze transfixed.

You’re as good as can be.
And I’m good as well.
The dark just calls me.
I’d like to remain in the spell.

Do you understand?
I hope you get it now.
I’m through with your demand.
Time to be me somehow.

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2009-01-28 08:21 PM

This poems is good. But to be honest this poem just confused me.. The only thing I understand was the beginning stanza and the final line... everything in between was just confusing for me..

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

2 posted 2009-01-28 11:25 PM

It rhymes nicely but i have to agree with Zach, its a bit confusing, i think i kinda get most of it except for the 4th stanza.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

3 posted 2009-01-29 06:58 PM

Lol! Seems like I'm the one talking in riddles now... Most of my closest frinns get it. My mom has changed a lot of stuff about me. I used to dress in only black and red and skulls and crosses. Mom won't let me anyone though and I'm rather tired of changing for her...Thanks for tha comments

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

4 posted 2009-01-29 07:11 PM

Lol, sorry for what your going through with your mom, She can try to change the outside, but no one can change what's inside, and what's inside is the most important part of you!!

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

5 posted 2009-01-29 09:43 PM

Lol. Freeand2Sexy that goes twice for me. People are valued for whats on the inside. Keep shining that inner light hun! :P lol

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

6 posted 2009-01-30 08:48 AM

Thanks guys!! =]]

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