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Dark Poetry #5

Depression

davidicarmel
New Member

since 2013-05-28

Posts 2

0 posted 2013-05-28 01:30 AM

I can't understand/
the seas are rushing, the waves overcoming me/
struck, trapped, held/
the watchful eyes has turned/
the light and beacon I was looking to is gone/
my body frail, painted with colors dark as night/
weak, helpless/
crawling towards what I can't see/
holding this torch that'll never be lit/
no thoughts/ caught in webs/
being eaten slowly by my captor/
calling out, where is my savior, where is my light/
screaming, groaning, moaning/
an empty hall is all that receives me/
nothing to stop the dragging, no one to calm the seas

byski
Member

since 2006-01-26

Posts 235
Alberta, Canada

1 posted 2013-09-08 12:10 PM

Tons of content there, almost every break can be expanded upon to a full poem on its own.

It made me feel confusion and anxiety , good write.

Poespeaks
New Member

since 2014-04-03

Posts 3

2 posted 2014-04-03 07:27 PM

Your write is so familiar - like when awakened from a claustrophobic nightmare, excellent imagery

Poespeaks
New Member

since 2014-04-03

Posts 3

3 posted 2014-04-03 07:31 PM

Your write is so familiar - like when awakened from a claustrophobic nightmare, excellent imagery

DaysofView
Member

since 2014-04-01

Posts 433
Just A Slice Of The Pie

4 posted 2014-04-03 08:26 PM

Futility in each worded phrase. I can feel the isolation clear over here.

It was just a thought which made them run. It was just an act that killed them.

HeliaHeart
Member

since 2008-11-16

Posts 53
Georgia

5 posted 2014-11-20 04:30 PM

So darkly reflective. Brings all the lost lonely moments to the surface of your memories.

~Lia
"Live as if you were to die tomorrow, Learn as if you were to live forever"
-M. K. Ghandi

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