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black coal |
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mikeandrew Member
since 2010-11-18
Posts 198
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Black coal deposits,with thick rich layers of veins, called black gold, burning out of control under silent hill vomiting out from the earth's guts, a black poisonous toxic fume gushes forth, morphing into lethal black ominous clouds. pouring down cluster droplets of acid rain bombs, bursting in air, over marble and limestone, headstones, and pagan grave stones,melting inscriptions away on silent hill [This message has been edited by mikeandrew (12-06-2010 04:43 AM).] |
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pyre Member
since 2008-05-16
Posts 136 |
This poem sounds a little broken... Like maybe its too much too fast with too many directions all at once. Otherwise nice. Does she pray, or am I prey? |
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