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Fear in my eyes
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Fear in my eyes |
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Swisha Junior Member
since 2009-07-22
Posts 32 |
I've seen nights full of pain, days of the same You keep the sunshine and I'll take the rain I have ice in my veins and hate in my heart I feel the truth has finally tore me apart I search but never find, I hurt but never cry But i'm cursed, so I work and forever try The mirror shows too much fear in my own eyes Who am I, can't see through my own lies I try to deceive myself, but i'm all alone I see a house full of friends, but no ones home I'm looking for something to keep me believing With my eyes wide open, i'm just not seeing Anxiety and depression constantly beating me I've lost all strength to fight, it's past scary Like a ghost that you can't see, but surely feel A chill up your spine, your courage it's come to steal Ignorance is bliss and the happy are surely blind With death and suffering where is the joy people find? |
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Novus_Os Member
since 2010-07-21
Posts 115West Coast, USA |
WOW. Powerful, and deep. Very good. I especially like the part about you talking about a ghost, sapping your courage. Sometimes, we all have to dig deep. Regards, Novus_Os Life is meant to be enjoyed, not just endured. |
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Weeping willow Junior Member
since 2010-08-29
Posts 13Mississippi |
That poem is filled with pain and I can feel it in every line,Good write |
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Swisha Junior Member
since 2009-07-22
Posts 32 |
Thank you both for the feedback! It was deep, and very hurt filled. This is something I do to release that kind of stress in my life.. It's nice to see some can understand/appreciate it! Thank you both |
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Shy-Girl1 New Member
since 2010-03-23
Posts 5C.A. |
This I can relate to, deep and insightfull. Writing what you feel is the best way to release pressure and stress. |
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Pixie Wales Junior Member
since 2010-07-29
Posts 21UK |
Hi Swisha I really like this - it gave me goosebumps (and for a change, the weather, here in Wales, has nothing to do with it!) Very powerful stuff. I particularly liked "you keep the sunshine and I'll take the rain" - I can relate to that. Also relate to the line about a house full of friends but no one's at home. The world can be a lonely place, especially for those of us with a tendancy not to see it in black and white alone but with all the shades of grey in between, as so many of the people on this site seem to be. Take care and I hope to "speak" to you again very soon, Pixie |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
the beginning has a few lines from a Lil' wayne song , but other than that the rest was good  There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy |
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Swisha Junior Member
since 2009-07-22
Posts 32 |
That's awesome you recognize that! Love the lil wayne song, full of great lyrics. Sometimes I like to have a drink, listen to a song,use a verse based on that and go from there. Thanks everyone for the feedback though! It's great to hear, hopefully i'll have something else to post soon. And looking forward to reading something from each of you. |
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FloraScars Junior Member
since 2010-11-08
Posts 33VA, USA |
this poem is absolutely amazing. it really touches me. very creative and expressive. straight from the soul. |
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bigthinker8 Junior Member
since 2010-11-22
Posts 19Chicago Il |
Thank you for your poem, I think most of us can relate. |
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