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since 2008-12-03
Posts 186
Toronto, Canada

0 posted 2009-01-15 10:00 AM

Considered one 'hell' of a man,
I'm Lucifer forsaking mass.
I'm an alien
without a Roswell crash
An hour glass
Deprived of Egyptian sand.
Call me a survivor,
don’t lend me a hand
Still-birth with a heart beat
crying for a savior
I'm a new beginning
New King to the throne
Finally allowed to go home
I'm the righteous vision
of black snow
Raw meat on my plate
Raw grapes in my cup
Stale bread on the table
Failing thoughts of miracles
Never felt so real
The sting, like peeled skin heals thin
I'm Alchwitz
with constant news about German Jews,
writing poems,
defining terms like "The Blues".
Bodies that leave no clues.
Ashes to ashes, rest in peace.
Families in grief, strong beliefs
Scream and shout. Get it all out.
Nuclear fallout
I'm knowledgeable about such things.
I'm beyond any doubt
day in, day out
with thoughts well thought out
I'm guttering out with it,
fans mutterin and stutterin about it
A little off topic, yeah I know.
But what yeah gonna do...
My thoughts that breakthrough
aint passive,
they are persuasive
Like Hindus.

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Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891
1 posted 2009-01-15 09:03 PM

I really liked the line;

"I'm the righteous vision
of black snow"

I don't know why, but it just sounds cool.
Good write,


Emmalee Janelle

Junior Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 45
2 posted 2009-02-25 08:53 PM

I really liked this man.  Is it wrong to say a
poem is grimy? :P

In such an ugly time, beauty is the real protest

since 2009-01-18
Posts 481
Stafford England
3 posted 2009-02-26 02:46 PM

Crushing imagery and a bold statement of self Def.

Keep it up bud.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

New Member
since 2009-02-22
Posts 9

4 posted 2009-02-26 03:57 PM

Awesome I really like it. It was great!!!!!!!
Junior Member
since 2009-03-15
Posts 25

5 posted 2009-03-15 08:49 PM

Each poem of yours has genius quotes that ANYone can relate to.

This one stuck out to me. Amongst others--

An hour glass
Deprived of Egyptian sand.

Your work makes so much sense to me-- I'm totally inspired to write when I read your poems.

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