Dark Poetry #5 |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
I'm Considered one 'hell' of a man, I'm Lucifer forsaking mass. I'm an alien without a Roswell crash An hour glass Deprived of Egyptian sand. Call me a survivor, don’t lend me a hand Still-birth with a heart beat crying for a savior I'm a new beginning New King to the throne Finally allowed to go home I'm the righteous vision of black snow Raw meat on my plate Raw grapes in my cup Stale bread on the table Failing thoughts of miracles Never felt so real The sting, like peeled skin Damn...it heals thin I'm Alchwitz with constant news about German Jews, writing poems, defining terms like "The Blues". Bodies that leave no clues. Ashes to ashes, rest in peace. Families in grief, strong beliefs Scream and shout. Get it all out. Nuclear fallout I'm knowledgeable about such things. I'm beyond any doubt day in, day out with thoughts well thought out I'm guttering out with it, fans mutterin and stutterin about it A little off topic, yeah I know. But what yeah gonna do... My thoughts that breakthrough aint passive, they are persuasive Like Hindus. |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
I really liked the line; "I'm the righteous vision of black snow" I don't know why, but it just sounds cool. Good write, {~~*~~} Emmalee Janelle |
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greytree Junior Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 45Wales |
I really liked this man. Is it wrong to say a poem is grimy? :P In such an ugly time, beauty is the real protest |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Crushing imagery and a bold statement of self Def. Keep it up bud. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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Quail New Member
since 2009-02-22
Posts 9 |
Awesome I really like it. It was great!!!!!!! |
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Rocheal Junior Member
since 2009-03-15
Posts 25 |
Each poem of yours has genius quotes that ANYone can relate to. This one stuck out to me. Amongst others-- An hour glass Deprived of Egyptian sand. Your work makes so much sense to me-- I'm totally inspired to write when I read your poems. |
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