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His Favorite Broken Toy
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His Favorite Broken Toy |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa 
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Here you are again just like always With your hurtful words and your awkward tongue Here you always are I flinch and I hide I hide and I cringe But I can't get away I never even had a chance I pretend and I imagine I imagine and I ignore But I can't get away Here your again just like always With your bumbling hands and your dirty, secret past Here you always are I rage and I stay I stay and I hate A little more with each time But I can't get away I never could Flinching and cringing Pretend and ignore I rage and I hate But only inside my heart Because I won't get away Never could Never have Never even had a chance You have me now just as you always have Like a child with a toy His favorite broken toy If I don't say it...who will? |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
This is my favorite poem from you. Love the last stanza  |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
Thank you. You know how each piece you write has a special place and meaning - this one, for me, is especailly important because I've never said it before...I think it may be my favorite too If I don't say it...who will? |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
The word choice that you employ and your structure were really impressive. |
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Stitches Member
since 2009-11-27
Posts 159United Kingdom |
I love it, especially how it all comes together at the end. Very touching. 'I feel like an animal, and I don't think that I get it. But one day I'll see you around.' |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
Earl and Stitches, Thank you both for reading and commenting!!! If I don't say it...who will? |
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