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Dark Poetry #5
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Sheen
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since 2010-01-10
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0 posted 2010-01-11 08:19 PM



How long can any man detain
from his sorrow of being away from you
How will, I overcome this pain
as I suffer and weep and feel this blue

Do you not feel the same
if not then am I lost for searching what's true
You make it seem I'm the only one to blame
for weeping in sorrow on searching for you
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1 posted 2010-01-12 08:44 AM

I love the last stanza! I don't know why but it just seemed so emotional and powerful (yet tragic.)  Good job!
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