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"i cant tell you" (not sure about a title)
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NormalitxButterfly Member
since 2008-07-09
Posts 107 |
i cant help but see it the disappointment if you even knew the half of it would you still love me with that unconditional mothers love that warm mirage that i wrap tightly around my sinful heart after cutting off today's ugliness Even if you don't know it You are my ___?____ im sorry i never meant to deceive you i was never that sweet girl you loved but i still loved you even then i cant help but see your farther away if you knew even the half of it would you disappear completely leaving me alone in this world that's already empty home, the illusion that i return to when im too weak after cutting off impurities even if you don't know it its so i ____?_____ im sorry I noticed that if we come to separate I won't be able to go on I may vanish easily The me which you love that i cant tell you |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
The speaker's insecurities about her parents are apparently more common than I thought. You might like to watch your spelling more. For example: "i cant help but see your farther away" should be "i cant help but see / you further away" This poem isn't as good as some of your other writing. |
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