Anselm an Affront to His Religion

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Dark Poetry #5

Anselm an Affront to His Religion

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

0 posted 2009-01-07 11:34 PM

That I created you may well have been
my greatest mistake
                    to carry me across the ocean
my greatest triumph in spite of its cold empty depths

That you created me may well have been
your humblest purpose
                    to keep you company outside time
your humblest error in spite of being able to stop it
             Cursed
             masks
             shattered.
             fears cover the ancient muscle that
             draws the unknowable this way and that

And man the demands of his God
a sacrifice of praise

And I sit back and paint the canvas left behind
by so many years of grave rational depression.

Life's short. Think hard!
Me!

JenniferMaxwell

Member Elite

since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

1 posted 2009-01-08 04:00 AM

"fears cover the ancient muscle that
draws the unknowable this way and that"

Your writing keeps getting better and better. Those lines are just fantastic!

prize
Member

since 2008-11-21

Posts 116

2 posted 2009-01-15 08:15 AM

I enjoyed your poem as well. The way you set up your poems is interesting visually and uniquely creative.

I love the lines Jennifer mentions, as well as the powerful ending:

And I sit back and paint the canvas left behind
by so many years of grave rational depression.

Thanks for sharing, P

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

3 posted 2010-04-14 11:24 PM

Thanks guys.

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