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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa 
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The cut of a glance the bite of a sharp word It hurt me so but I didn't cry I wouldn't cry I remained silent and resolved A lesson learned Only when assured that no one watched I would hold my pain in my hands and examine it closely The chill of a turned shoulder the ache of a disappointed disregard the hollowing that follows It hurt so but I wouldn't cry I remained unflinching and remote A lesson learned well Only when assured that I was indeed alone would I open my wounds and trace their jagged lines It hurt me so Silent Resolved Remote Unflinching The results of a lesson learned well Only once I was assured that you wouldn't hear, wouldn't see, wouln't know I opened my heart to examine my pain and trace the lines of my wounds But I didn't cry Not because I wouldn't No, not even because it didn't hurt No I didn't cry because I was no longer able My education complete [This message has been edited by MorningStar (10-26-2009 10:06 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Aenea, This is quite possibly one of the best "dark" poems I have ever read. I don't frequent the Dark Forum much, but have been introduced to it, needless of my time here, via complaints of going against the rules and guideslines. I'm honored to be one of the first to read you, and I welcome you not only to Passions, but applaud the way you highlighted a dark forum with such insight! Please check your email for a Very Special Welcome! Sunshine |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
Thank you kindly! |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I agree with our Sunshine. I became a Deputy Moderator of the Dark side because I so rarely read in here. You made me want to read more - this is truly good writing. I will be reading more of yours. Alison |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
WOW! Krysti |
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Mr Naz Junior Member
since 2009-10-22
Posts 29London United Kingdom |
MorningStar- well done, I liked this very much and you have captured the feelings, the emotions, the sentiment so well, a good piece for the Dark Poetry section. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Wow! This is amazing. Defiantly going into my library.  Keep writing! -Zach |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Aenea, Last evening at our local writing group, I mentioned your poem as one of the more exceptional pieces I have read regarding "dark poetry". Today I linked you to all of our members, several of whom are now associated with PiP. I look forward to their thoughts on your remarkable piece. Sunshine/Karilea |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Morning Star...Many important lessons come to us in life, some by way of joy, some by sorrow. To understand the lesson is the important part and not to avoid its impact because of fear. Wisdom grows in your words of poetry. Welcome to Pip. |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
Karilea, thank you for the support! You know there is special kind of freedom and release in finally saying what you really feel - and then having someone else understand you. So,thank you all for listening. If I don't say it...who will? |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Welcome! It's definitely tough to trump the praise our Sunshine has shown your way; though, I admit, it would be much harder to disagree with her. "Lessons" shows great structure and tone, speaking from the soul. Well done! -*-*- |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Only when assured that I was indeed alone would I open my wounds and trace their jagged lines Love It! Welcome to PiP There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy |
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shalisadefa Member
since 2009-08-13
Posts 114 |
disturbingly good, a very harsh lesson learned. |
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