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MADAM *AP* New Member
since 2009-08-14
Posts 4 |
This will be my only post! Thanks for reading! GHOST its the next day my eyes are heavy my focus is nothing i go through another.... death of a living friend this death is worse than actual death because they still roam the earth it hurts to know that someone that helped is now out of reach but they still exist.... the pull is way to intense meds will not help temper the calling my brain is screaming for relief in the form of questions the blade gently carresses my skin but it will not bare blood anymore i am drained from sickness being suffocated by my own obsessive mind its another blow to my psyche that is hangin on by a thread its the end of the week but its the beginning of another downturn i am giddy with mental angst my grin is very telling to people that really know me they don't like to see that grin they know what it means it offers them a scare the world is so small its tough to find someone that can relate its tough to find someone that understands all you want is the connection of a friendship that will help to heal now the calmness turns to anger rules are meant to be broken i want to lash out at all boundaries smashing them to little bits of nothing at my feet i have resisted rules and boundaries all of my life it has gotten me nowhere it only serves as temporary relief for my heightened craziness she is now a ghost that haunts me via words the club doors are now shut wood planks are nailed across the opening facing another death of a living friend that understood ME as i did her i know the truth hurts i am sorry that it doesn't have a happy ending but this is me, no sugar coating involved this is me, alone in my own devastation |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
quote: Good. |
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MADAM *AP* New Member
since 2009-08-14
Posts 4 |
Hey Moon...thanks for those welcoming words to the forum...i feel so warm & fuzzy now.. |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Oh sorry. You said you weren't joining the forum. If you've changed your mind, then welcome. I'm still not keen on the poem though. |
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MADAM *AP* New Member
since 2009-08-14
Posts 4 |
thats because i have no self confidence and i wasn't sure that people would appreciate the realism of my art...judging by your comment, i guess i was right... |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Maybe try to focus a little more on images rather than feelings when you write and condense and compress.  Take care. MB |
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prize Member
since 2008-11-21
Posts 116 |
I feel your emotions more than you know...which makes this poem great and so very sad...I'm touched deeply. P I hope you keep sharing... |
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BRP New Member
since 2009-06-06
Posts 8Isle of Wight, United Kingdom |
"This will be my only post!" Not meaning to cause offense or anything but that wasn't needed... Now to your poem. I loved it, although it was rather long. Maybe concentrate on condensing them down a little bit. Welcome to the forum by the way, I'm new myself so it's good to see someone else that is new also. |
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