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MADAM *AP*
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0 posted 2009-08-14 11:10 AM


This will be my only post!
Thanks for reading!

GHOST

its the next day
my eyes are heavy
my focus is nothing
i go through another....
death of a living friend

this death is worse than actual death
because they still roam the earth
it hurts to know that someone
that helped is now out of reach
but they still exist....

the pull is way to intense
meds will not help temper the calling
my brain is screaming for relief
in the form of questions
the blade gently carresses my skin
but it will not bare blood anymore
i am drained from sickness
being suffocated by my own obsessive mind

its another blow to my psyche
that is hangin on by a thread
its the end of the week
but its the beginning of another downturn
i am giddy with mental angst
my grin is very telling to people that really know me
they don't like to see that grin
they know what it means
it offers them a scare

the world is so small
its tough to find someone that can relate
its tough to find someone that understands
all you want is the connection
of a friendship that will help to heal

now the calmness turns to anger
rules are meant to be broken
i want to lash out at all boundaries
smashing them to little bits of nothing
at my feet
i have resisted rules and boundaries
all of my life
it has gotten me nowhere
it only serves as temporary relief
for my heightened craziness

she is now a ghost
that haunts me via words
the club doors are now shut
wood planks are nailed across the opening
facing another death of a living friend
that understood ME as i did her
i know the truth hurts
i am sorry that it doesn't have a happy ending
but this is me, no sugar coating involved
this is me, alone in my own devastation



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1 posted 2009-08-14 11:39 AM




quote:
This will be my only post!

Good.

MADAM *AP*
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2 posted 2009-08-14 12:27 PM


Hey Moon...thanks for those welcoming words to the forum...i feel so warm & fuzzy now..
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3 posted 2009-08-14 01:18 PM


Oh sorry. You said you weren't joining the forum.  If you've changed your mind, then welcome.  I'm still not keen on the poem though.
MADAM *AP*
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4 posted 2009-08-14 01:23 PM


thats because i have no self confidence and i wasn't sure that people would appreciate the realism of my art...judging by your comment, i guess i was right...
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5 posted 2009-08-14 03:32 PM


ok I apologise and a sincere welcome to PiP.  Your poem was a little, umm, heavy for my taste and in parts sounds semi-suicidal, but it was no-where near as bad as some writing I've seen here, and if you are a beginner poet then it's not bad at all in truth.

Maybe try to focus a little more on images rather than feelings when you write and condense and compress.  

Take care.

MB

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6 posted 2009-08-14 08:24 PM


I feel your emotions more than you know...which makes this poem great and so very sad...I'm touched deeply.

P
I hope you keep sharing...

BRP
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7 posted 2009-08-15 08:33 PM


"This will be my only post!"
Not meaning to cause offense or anything but that wasn't needed...

Now to your poem. I loved it, although it was rather long.

Maybe concentrate on condensing them down a little bit.
Welcome to the forum by the way, I'm new myself so it's good to see someone else that is new also.

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