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Talh1n0vl3v1tat10n
New Member

since 2009-07-28

Posts 6

0 posted 2009-07-29 09:34 AM

your salts will be laid upon the surface
your breathe will remember the first taste of air
her face will remain written on your forhead
present the solids remember the scars
time and technique pull us up to higher places
birth and birthstones more than signify our nature
our broken pieces float upon the waters edge
broken pieces float upon the dim surface
flat upon the heads of those who witnessed the birth
dim upon the lights of the serpents of all time
its time we closed our ears and let our eyes scope hearing
the forests will forever bear witness to an immovable eternity
watch them fall watch their spirits scream
we lost peace among the woes of love
the arrows reigned down and took a tide of what we once called home
this is vicious relieving sanity crossing
this is the love of him pouring down upon us
the question is
will we hear or see what is to come
will we recognize
i stand in love for you for my eternity

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2009-07-29 03:05 PM

A very interesting first posting. Welcome to Passions, and if you check your email you will find a special welcome from us all here.

Mysteria

crimsonXnails
Member

since 2008-02-10

Posts 108
dark/little/heavan.:*:.

2 posted 2009-07-29 04:24 PM

hey! great first post, although i might suggest teen poetry fer some (not all) of ur poetry. you should submit ur poems from dA, they're reeeally awsome! just.another.falling.star (pip name) is from dA, her account is TantalizedBaker and/or SilentOSunshine (dA name). you aught to check her out, you'd get along me thinks;P also Falling rain in teen poetry is really good, have fun!

!Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

3 posted 2009-07-29 09:23 PM

(haha, tracey thinks we'd get along, that must be a good thing then).
anyways, yeah. i read this and its wonderful. the flow of the words and the description of your topic is nicely put together. great job on your first post!
email me if you want to talk.
library.

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

4 posted 2009-08-06 05:32 PM

Welcome. And well done, I loved the fact that you dint rhyme i believe it lends just as much emotion as rhyming. Thank you for sharing.

Words have power, Im going to unleash the power of my soul.

Talh1n0vl3v1tat10n
New Member

since 2009-07-28

Posts 6

5 posted 2009-08-07 09:06 AM

Thanks to everyone for their comments

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