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fractal007
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958
0 posted 2009-05-20 12:43 PM

careening out of control
      lost all sense
   gyro stabilizer
       listless
        lost
   wait
   till
   you
   hit
   a
   wall
   then  you'll know how it feels to have purpose again.

Life's short.  Think hard!
Me!

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Def-init
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since 2008-12-03
Posts 186
Toronto, Canada
1 posted 2009-05-20 08:19 PM

A very interesting way to structure your poem.
I like the metaphor in it.
Good read.

- If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell -
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