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Dark Poetry #5

Smash my soul

zaxby
Junior Member

since 2009-03-05

Posts 48
California

0 posted 2009-03-27 12:35 PM

Smash my soul
into a billion fragments,
Spread it like peanut butter on infestations
of demonic hoards.
Shattered Christ will not explain endings
for blind oblivion.

Ruptured earth bleeds from wounds too old
as night falls,
black holes suck leechlike
in forever’s banished by God.
Gravity melds as one in carnal absolution
pestilence surrounds,
fallen angels from the void tear apart
all that was nourished in life.

Watch the carnivores feed.
Minds full of knowledge waste inspiration on moments of insipid glory.
Never seen or felt by the children of tomorrow.
Futile race on broken treadmills,
As tears fall on tainted waters.

Def-init
Member

since 2008-12-03

Posts 186
Toronto, Canada

1 posted 2009-03-28 12:10 PM

"Ruptured earth bleeds from wounds too old
as night falls,
black holes suck leechlike
in forever’s banished by God.
Gravity melds as one in carnal absolution
pestilence surrounds,
fallen angels from the void tear apart
all that was nourished in life."

That was pretty good. I liked that stanza a lot. A really graphic poem indeed. Keep it up.

- If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell -

Suncleaver
Member

since 2009-01-18

Posts 481
Stafford England

2 posted 2009-03-31 02:21 AM

Powerful imagery and a philosophical context.

I really enjoyed this.

In these lonely halls no moon will weep, no sun will shine.
In these narrow rooms no tears are seen, no laughter heard!

pandabear
Junior Member

since 2009-03-08

Posts 36

3 posted 2009-04-01 07:38 PM

really good i liked how you put it a lot keep up the good work

-kara

pandabear
Junior Member

since 2009-03-08

Posts 36

4 posted 2009-04-01 07:41 PM

a little sad in a way and really good keep it up

-kara

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