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Intellectual Poison |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
My brain fluid can turn something as innocent as puppy shampoo, into a metaphor of genocide for the fleas that inhabit life next to you This recession is depressing, Cant even afford the fee for my antidepressants... I sit in the back seat. I stare at my life, looking through a rear-view. Life sucks while in prison. I'm so hungry I attack without reason My I-Pod beats, applauding sounds from the concrete street. I can never go home; I face a real fact... Fate and the misfortune of dying alone... The sounds of bullets invaded my brain. A python in the grass tempts me again. I died under the Sun. Rays of ultra-violet. Rays powerful enough to pierce a casket. Drugs produce fiends, a new era in the rise of machines. Now, who speaks for us? The thought of an immaculate conception has me driven with speculation believing in the theory of 'Freemasons'. Gunmen heighten my senses, hidden on the border of hiding in heaven. I'm a medieval historian carving out my past public school failed me, yet my education is vast. Eternal guardsmen stood next to the Pharaohs. Protected them while blackening out the sun with arrows That’s beautiful and disturbing, a lotus flower on the uniform of a Kremlin. Vanquish my opponents with Agent Orange I'm the original Northman, a feared Viking I pray to the North King Odin. Born the Scion of a Saxon with waves of slaves rivaling oceans. This crimson text frightens legions, as if Murlin himself was leading Spartans. - If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell - [This message has been edited by Def-init (03-05-2009 06:40 PM).] |
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zaxby Junior Member
since 2009-03-05
Posts 48California |
This gets more intense as the verses flow by so it must be working son of pillagers. |
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impact Junior Member
since 2009-03-07
Posts 27 |
I really liked this a lot, very well written. The only thing that I was questionable about was when you said "life sucks" I feel the word sucks could be replaced with something more impacting. Like I said though great poem! |
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impact Junior Member
since 2009-03-07
Posts 27 |
I really liked this a lot, very well written. The only thing that I was questionable about was when you said "life sucks" I feel the word sucks could be replaced with something more impacting. Like I said though great poem! |
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