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pyre
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0 posted 2008-12-28 02:09 AM




I'm fighting with all my heart
The bullets are just and strong
My fellow soldiers are falling
Red bombs blast louder than before
The enemy is everywhere I look

I am one man with my weapon
I'm fighting for my survival
I'm loosing
I'm struggling
I'm loosing as a loser

My poetry is eatten by cannibals
Friends and family need to feed
This is great beyond myself
To do unto others
As I would have done to me

The raw fight
The raw fight
The fight into the night
Raw meat against steel
Epithet reads remnants of my will

Does she pray, or am I prey?  

© Copyright 2008 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
JenniferMaxwell
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1 posted 2008-12-28 07:43 AM


"My poetry is eatten by cannibals"
Fascinating line. Keep on writing!

Anniepimm
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2 posted 2008-12-28 07:45 AM


wonderfully written poem my friend
I particularly liked this stanza
It depicts the power struggle that this story tells, Well Penned....
Annie

{{My poetry is eaten by cannibals
Friends and family need to feed
This is great beyond myself
To do unto others
As I would have done to me}}

Def-init
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since 2008-12-03
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3 posted 2008-12-29 06:07 AM


"My poetry is eatten by cannibals
Friends and family need to feed
This is great beyond myself
To do unto others
As I would have done to me"

Very nice. Good choice of words here.
Keep the fire droppin!!

prize
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since 2008-11-21
Posts 116

4 posted 2008-12-29 04:07 PM


Hi Pyre,

I agree, that is the best stanza in your poem.  Nice job.

P

pyre
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since 2008-05-16
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5 posted 2009-01-02 04:11 AM


thank you.

pyre

Does she pray, or am I prey?  

pyre
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6 posted 2010-02-21 10:39 PM


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