Dark Poetry #5 |
War On the Loosing Side |
pyre Member
since 2008-05-16
Posts 136 |
I'm fighting with all my heart The bullets are just and strong My fellow soldiers are falling Red bombs blast louder than before The enemy is everywhere I look I am one man with my weapon I'm fighting for my survival I'm loosing I'm struggling I'm loosing as a loser My poetry is eatten by cannibals Friends and family need to feed This is great beyond myself To do unto others As I would have done to me The raw fight The raw fight The fight into the night Raw meat against steel Epithet reads remnants of my will Does she pray, or am I prey? |
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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
Posts 2423 |
"My poetry is eatten by cannibals" Fascinating line. Keep on writing! |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
wonderfully written poem my friend I particularly liked this stanza It depicts the power struggle that this story tells, Well Penned.... Annie {{My poetry is eaten by cannibals Friends and family need to feed This is great beyond myself To do unto others As I would have done to me}} |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
"My poetry is eatten by cannibals Friends and family need to feed This is great beyond myself To do unto others As I would have done to me" Very nice. Good choice of words here. Keep the fire droppin!! |
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prize Member
since 2008-11-21
Posts 116 |
Hi Pyre, I agree, that is the best stanza in your poem. Nice job. P |
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pyre Member
since 2008-05-16
Posts 136 |
thank you. pyre Does she pray, or am I prey? |
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pyre Member
since 2008-05-16
Posts 136 |
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