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I and destiny
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I and destiny |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria 
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i have finally decided to withdraw. i have decided also to rise wite flags as well as go away from life.. there is no any possibility for leave taking. i'm in a world and you are in an other you want to travel and go away whereas i want to stay.. you like the day while i longe for the night. you prefer the shape whereas i prefer the contant you...you and me....me each of us have discovered after crossing the road that we have climbed the mistaken plane. me and destiny are like the east and the ouest me and destiny are like fire and water... like raison and madness....the truth and lie. they are deeply contrasted.. i have found my self drowned in the lac of tears with blad's drops.these blad's drops are drown off from the exhausted heart. a drop....a drop i have dicovred that i have not anderstood i have discovered also that my hart have not well caught. the vibration of emotions. i have not haerd..i have not seen each mistak is a lie and an illusion at the same time. finally the most difecult moment have come to confess that you have mistaken. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear friend nourzihane, this is a strong outcry of your bleeding heart. Even though your knowledge of English needs improvement, your message comes across powerfully. Allow me to quote you while correcting some typos: quote: May you decide for your highest good, my sweet and sad friend. Know that you are deeply loved and cherished by the Creator of all life and that He wants you to be happy, after the shedding of so many tears. And you are invited to co-create your life. We learn while living. So may you just love yourself and forgive what you think needs to be forgiven and move on ... towards a brighter future. Walk in peace and continue to share your profound reflections on life and love and you will see you will love the day too and sunshine! Thank you for sharing. Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
dear margherita I am glad that you're the first person who replys to my topic thank you for your correction and sorry for the distrub and this pushes me forward to better learn the english language Fortunately that i found the person who helps me to achieve all this thank you again nourzihane |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You do not disturb, ever!! I loved your poem and I loved to give it the deserved attention. You and your destiny are friends not enemies, I know that you are wise, my friend. You will improve your English. I need also to improve, we can never learn enough! Bisous Margherita  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I enjoyed your poem, Nourzihane but the red print is very hard on the eyes. Ida |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
dear margherita All my appreciation. love and respect for your presence, which i derive from it the movement and the activity. There remains a dark corner doesn't shine(ignite) it candles untill you come with this wonderful sparkling thank you Bisou |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
....sir.... thank you for your wonderful pass nourzihane |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Yes margherita put a lovely spin on this poem. It read well, but the essence was stil there. your first line was scarily dark. you may have waved the white flag at life but you live Vive la Nourzihane! |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
Dear martiniat8 http://www.approfusion.fr/fleurs/France/images/fiches/1.jpg |
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