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SkaaDee
Member

since 2008-04-07

Posts 116
Canada

0 posted 2008-08-16 12:53 PM

I'm gonna' take this bat
and hit that ball
only because you dare to throw it.

America,
the dusty new horizon
for those in the game
and moving.

Fields cleared
of the growth from
a thousand years
with bare hands and dreams.

City nights hustle
with the sound of horses
reflected by lamp light
in steam.

Action -
cheering on the sound
of trumpets and violins
in dimly lit store fronts

... saying
"yes we can too." -
fudging back home melodies
into new.

I'm gonna' take this stick
and hit that bundle of tar, twine and leather
because I can
and what are you going to do about it ?

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2008-08-16 04:57 AM

Powerful, impressive write! Yes you can, because you know you can.

Love,
Margherita

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2008-08-16 12:56 PM

I read this yesterday, and again today. I believe that there is much that I understand, but will be reading it again, to see if I can change my assumptions into more certainty. Enjoyed it both times. Yes, give the bundle of tar, twine and leather a jolly good whack!

- Owl

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2008-08-17 05:26 PM

I think I have got it all this time. Lots of layers of bubbling powerful hope and optimism for the future in America and for those who live there, if only one has the courage to stand up and believe in oneself and know that the sky is the limit. Even if I am wrong, I certainly enjoyed it, especially the energising self-motivation in it.

- Owl

SkaaDee
Member

since 2008-04-07

Posts 116
Canada

4 posted 2008-08-31 08:58 PM

Hi Owlsa

I'm delighted that you came back to the poem.
I can't say what you've read into it is wrong.
Poems can be a bit of an ink blot test.

I had rugged American independence in mind when I wrote this.

The most noble of American characteristics, in my opinion.

I'm not American by the way.

thanks

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